Revision III // September 30, 2014

With Sail to Prevail website at end title

Without Sail to Prevail website at end title

Revision II // September 12, 2014

Changes

0:34 - Shot of Kathy entering Kayak shortened. Kept to demonstrate her physical disability of osteoporosis in her back. 

0:36 - While cutting out all shots of her kayaking would be ideal, we do at some point need to see her speaking. Through the line "either way you are right" is now one of two shots of her kayaking. 

0:45 - Added "Made possible by" to the Sail to Prevail title card.

1:07 - Shots of Kathy entering the kayak replaced with shots of George buckling into boat and Sail to Prevail staff taking chair away. 

1:35 - Removed Kathy's soundbite about falling while waterskiing.

1:51 - Zoomed in slightly on Kathy to crop out kayak paddle.

1:53 - Added more shots of veterans with different abilities.

2:07 - Removed shots of Ralph foot paddling kayak.

2:13 - Added more shots of participants enjoying each other, laughing. 

2:31 - Kept ending joke from George about tipping over to keep humor in the piece.

2:40 - Added end title card for Sail to Prevail to give the audience a call to action.

For consideration:
- Shot selection
- Soundbite selection
- Message and story

Not to consider:
- Color, still ungraded
- Audio, still unmixed

Revision I // September 3

Changes 

- Sail to Prevail logo added at 0:47 seconds.

- Sail to Prevail shot of main sail at 1:47, added soundbite of George saying, "If it wasn't for organizations like this, I would be miserable at home."

Other ways to drive Sail to Prevail traffic:

- Host on Sail to Prevail site, YouTube.

- What is the audience's call to action at the end of the film? Support Sail to Prevail?

For consideration:
- Shot selection
- Soundbite selection
- Message and story
- End title. What is the audience's call to action?

Not to consider:
- Color, still ungraded
- Audio, still unmixed


Rough Cut // August 13

Comments

- Not enough exposure of Sail to Prevail.

For consideration:
- Shot selection
- Soundbite selection
- Message and story
- End title. What is the audience's call to action?

Not to consider:
- Color, still ungraded
- Audio, still unmixed

Stills // July 24, 2014


Post Production Schedule // July 23, 2014

 

Wednesday, August 13

Tuesday, August 19

 

Delivery of rough cut

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